What a commissioner is actually looking for —‍ ‍Pitch/package checklist

The single most distinctive thing you could make. A one-page list of the questions a buyer silently asks before they pass. Feeds commission and shaping work directly, and nobody writing from the writer's side can make this credibly.

The Checklist - Read this before anyone else reads your draft.

Ten things to fix yourself first, drawn from the notes you've given a thousand times. Lower-stakes entry point that feeds shaping work.